土房子（学生习作）
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center\" align=\"center\"><b><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">土</span></b><b><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt\"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"> </font></span></span></b><b><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">房</span></b><b><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt\"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"> </font></span></span></b><b><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">子</span></b><b><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 22pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt\"></span></b></p><p /><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font size=\"3\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"></font></font></span></p><p /><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center\" align=\"center\"><font size=\"3\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">某初中</span><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\">902</font></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">班</span><span lang=\"EN-US\"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"> </font></span></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">严丹丹</span></font></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"><font size=\"3\"></font></font></span></p><p /><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"><font size=\"3\"></font></font></span></p><p /><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><font size=\"3\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"></font></span></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">“老余啊，你今年的棉花收了几百斤，卖了几千块了，赚了那么多钱，要盖新楼房了吧。”</span></font></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><font size=\"3\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"></span></font></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“我盖新房干吗？又没儿子又没女，活一年单，两年双，再说，这土砖壁子很结实呢！”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“你看人家老张的房屋，那气势，那模样，多舒坦哪！”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“那又咋的，再好看，又没有我家的房子结实。来年，我赚够了钱，就是盖，我也还盖土房子。这个老屋，就留着让我家的鸡、鸭子，过上好日子。”说完，老余继续干活。人们怎么劝，他也不信，就纷纷走开了。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“老伴，我回来了。今天真走运，有个兔子撞到树上，撞伤了，我放下锄子去一看，就把它捡回家了。今天晚上，就把它红烧了吃吧。”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">他的老伴头发早已花白，手里捧着个茶壶，从厨房里蹒跚地走出来，“哦，你的口福还真不浅咧！刚才隔壁林嫂来了，讲我家的墙土掉到他们家的院子里去了，把她家的鸡鸭吓得到处飞呢。”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“别听她胡说，我家房子挺结实的，肯定是她不服气，找岔。你快烧，我喝两盅。等会，我再去找她算帐！”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoBodyTextIndent\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“算了吧，多一事，不如少一事。图个清净，我俩都老了，动火伤自己身体，我还想多吃几年猪油呢。”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoBodyTextIndent\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoBodyTextIndent\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">老余吃着兔子肉，喝着老白酒，脸上青筋暴起，信了老伴的话，去房里看那老黑白电视去了，他靠在老式木椅上，望着墙壁上斑斑驳驳的石灰，看着椽子、桁条上的小瓦，不多会儿，迷迷糊糊地就打起呼噜了。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">黄家做红砖屋，他去帮忙；王家在公路边买商品房，他去恭贺。他还总是说自己家的土房子挺结实。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">可是有一天，不幸的事还是发生了。天刮起了狂风，乌云黑顶的，电闪雷鸣的，下起了一场大雨。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">大雨过后，老余的土房子倒了一间。隔壁林嫂家的红砖屋还是好好的。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><font size=\"3\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">村书记来了，要老余按照建设社会主义新农村的要求，重新盖新房屋。老余说</span><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\">:</font></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">：“我住了几十年了，都挺好的，都怪这场雨！”</span></font></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><font size=\"3\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"></span></font></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">几天之后，村里派人来帮老余盖房子。老余答应做红砖的了。在拆老屋时，他老伴说：“这几间，不拆，一定要留着，给鸡鸭也住宽敞些。”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">以前劝他盖楼房或者红砖房的人，一个个笑着问他：“老余啊，你咋不盖个土房子，那挺结实呢！”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">“哎，别提这档子事了……”</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font size=\"3\">上梁那天，老余点燃了万鞭，响彻山谷。</font></span></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><font size=\"3\"><font face=\"Times New Roman\"></font></font></span></p><p /><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 17.95pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.71; mso-char-indent-size: 10.45pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \"><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">评语：</font></span></p><font color=\"#0000ff\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">作者用小说的体裁，写出了老余的人物性格特征，语言描写突出，既符合人物身份，又推动了故事情节的发展。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: \"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"> </span></span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">（点评老师</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: \"><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\"> 天涯芳草</span></span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \">）</span></font><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: \"></span> 农民呀！其实他们的要求很简单…… 我也一样要求简单啊。 再次阅读，收效更大！ 再看了一篇，对指导老师的评语同感。望严丹丹同学加油！
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