天柱山人 发表于 2006-8-20 20:31

我是一只……

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TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"><p /></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\">我是一只……<span lang=\"EN-US\"><p /></span></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"><p /></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\">不管我是一只什么<span lang=\"EN-US\"><p /></span></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\">命运总有说不尽的遭遇<span lang=\"EN-US\"><p /></span></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\">可是我却能得到好多人的关注</font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><p /></span></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 224.4pt; TEXT-INDENT: -89.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"><p /></font></span></b></p><p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 304.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: \"Times New Roman\"\"><font size=\"3\"></font></span></p><p />

1869 发表于 2006-8-20 20:46

不管我是一只什么


命运总有说不尽的遭遇


可是我却能得到好多人的关注

好啊！

天柱山人 发表于 2006-8-20 20:53

这是我的学生的习作。她父母长年在北京打工，正月走，腊月回家。她非常想念她的父母，曾一度情绪低落过。

1869 发表于 2006-8-20 21:05

引用第2楼天柱山人于2006-08-20 20:53发表的“”:
这是我的学生的习作。她父母长年在北京打工，正月走，腊月回家。她非常想念她的父母，曾一度情绪低落过。
对学生也是一种鼓励。

云上波涛 发表于 2006-8-20 21:27

可以感受小孩的心情确实不好，不是逮住、踩住，就是捉住.....
希望小姑娘快乐，这个年龄的她，应该写出更欢乐的诗篇！

天柱山人 发表于 2006-8-20 23:55

<p>引用第3楼1869于2006-08-20 21:05发表的“”: 对学生也是一种鼓励。 </p><p>是的。问好1869！</p>

天柱山人 发表于 2006-8-20 23:58

<p>引用第4楼云上波涛于2006-08-20 21:27发表的“”: 可以感受小孩的心情确实不好，不是逮住、踩住，就是捉住..... 希望小姑娘快乐，这个年龄的她，应该写出更欢乐的诗篇！ </p><p>谢谢！好得最后一句用逆挽法，写出了美好的一面。</p>

轻松 发表于 2006-8-21 09:14

一个初中学生，写得不错。
虽叹命运不公，但结尾很好！没有消沉，而是看到了更多的关注。

欧阳冰云 发表于 2006-8-21 14:01

初中的学生，真了不起。继续加油哦。
天柱山人真是一位细心的好老师。
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